Act as a developmental editor. The draft below is a [type] for [audience] aiming to [goal]. Give feedback in this order: 1) Does the main point land? State it in one sentence as you understood it. 2) Structure: what to cut, move or add. 3) Weakest argument or section and how to strengthen it. 4) Where readers will get confused. 5) A prioritized revision plan (max 7 steps). Don't rewrite the draft. <draft>[paste]</draft>